Post by Ken Blake Post by Yurui Liu
Which of the following is better style?
1. He eventually recovered, albeit with severe brain damage, his
intelligence having dropped to the level of a six-year-old.
2. He eventually recovered, though with severe brain damage; his
intelligence had dropped to the level of a six-year-old.
Preferred styles vary from person to person. I greatly prefer number 2.
Number 1 for me. But I strongly agree with those who said that it would
be even better to break the statement into two sentences.
In addition, I agree that someone who remains with severe brain damage
has NOT recovered.
(A friend of mine is in that situation, as a result of strychnine
poisoning. She has gradually recovered a lot of function, but she will
never be capable of doing her old job.)
Peter Moylan http://www.pmoylan.org
Newcastle, NSW, Australia